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2014-09-03 22:34:01

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BTW He can't overcome EVERYTHING, his sanity is easily destroyed (childhood trauma, he murders rapists), he rarely wins a fight unscaved, etc. And also, how would Terrance be labeled Mary Sue if he can kick Rudolf's ass?
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2014-09-04 02:19:48
Mostly because he's an extension of the author's beliefs, can somehow get under the radar after killing people, and then just beat a big hunk of deer probably twice the size of him? It's starting to sound pretty Mary Sue-ish. Also, he apparently also gets the girl (Zu). Even though Zu thinks fondly of her rapists and wants to be friends with them. She even adores one of them.
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2014-09-04 16:48:22
Plus, 'childhood trauma', 'always wins even if he tried SO hard and hurt himself SO much!' and so forth are all very Gary Stu/Mary Sue'ish qualities in and of themselves. The character reeks of try-hard edginess and emo dark-for-the-sake-of-being-dark writing.
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2014-09-04 19:46:16
Well, this is my first time writing a character, and I haven't made a bio explaining things about him. Sorry if I seemed lazy when making this character. BTW, he owns a samurai sword that belonged to his dad, so I think Terrance could do some damage with it. A quick slice to the neck, and Terrance wins.
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2014-09-05 02:15:29
And he'd just happen to sleep with it? Is he a samurai too, now?
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2014-09-05 12:05:31
That's the sword he uses to KILL rapists, aaaaand he keeps it under his bed, just incase. Also, he had a break in, and when the burglers found him (he was waking up from noises he heard from his bed) and they beat the hell out of him. Terrance nearly died, and could barely fight them off. Terrance manages to get his sword and slice them up.
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2014-09-05 12:32:28
The fact that he uses the sword to partake in his Gary Stu vendettas doesn't exclude it from being a Gary Stu type of attribute to have in the first place.
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2014-09-05 05:29:45
..and now he has a katana, that he just so happened to inherit from his father. You do know that's literally THE most Mary Sue'ish attribute of them all, right? I'm not even being mean here, or trying to be, I'm actually hoping you notice these red flags.
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2014-09-05 11:59:56
That is the same sword he uses to kill rapists. I'm a novice writer, and thanks everyone, for your thoughts on Terrance. I WILL make him a better, more thought out character, thanks.